Remind me…
…to never write a virgin heroine again. I don’t care how realistic it is that a 19th century, unmarried, sheltered New England young lady would have no sexual experience. Trying to layer in the drama around the big event is a pain in the butt.
And then there’s Adam, who’s never deflowered a woman before and is also a pain in the butt. (Well, not literally, ’cause she’s not that kind of girl.)
“I’m feeling a little pressure here, woman.”
“Haven’t you done this before?”
“Many times, but you haven’t. What if you don’t like my way of goin’ about this? Hell, I could put you off sex forever.”
Seriously, first and last virgin.
August 17th, 2007 at 10:53 am
Your dialogue sounds better than some I’ve read. At least it’s realistic. No damned flowery phrases to clutter up the scene. Hey, if it doesn’t work out, he can always shoot her!:lmao:
August 18th, 2007 at 8:12 am
Adam doesn’t do so well with the damned flowery phrases.
It’s kinda funny when he tries, though.
A poet he’s not.
August 18th, 2007 at 9:39 am
When’s BMB gonna be out again?:roll:
August 19th, 2007 at 7:23 pm
He, 19th century English girls weren’t supposed to enjoy it anyway. “Close your eyes and think of England.”
But who wants to read that sort of sex scene?